Tuesday, 18 October 2011

50 Word Challenge for Grown Ups


 This week's challenge is for 50 words added to ... the autumn leaves... I decided to go with verse, not a genre with which I feel particularly comfortable. Here is my effort anyway.




Through my eyes.

The autumn leaves swirl, gyrate
as if in a death dance.                                                              
Slowly a pearly white presence
 eases through the collected remains
of countless year's dancers.       

As diamonds, strung on gossamer thread
 the tiny beads of icy dew,
await the tentative warming
of the rising sun.

In all this glorious beauty,
I walk on,
entranced.               




                          




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15 comments:

  1. Anonymous18 October 2011 at 19:57

    whoa! I can feel myself overpowered! I think 'dance of death' rather than 'death dance' IMO but wow! This is extremely good :)

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  2. Lynda18 October 2011 at 20:04

    Maybe you should have the confidence to try poetry more often. I think you are better at it than you think!

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  3. Unknown18 October 2011 at 20:08

    @ventahl, you are right, that would work better.
    @Lynda, thank you, maybe I'll try more often.

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  4. Sally-Jayne18 October 2011 at 20:21

    You're definititely better at it than you think. This is awesome!

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  5. willingdream18 October 2011 at 21:57

    Just WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! With a very big loud capital "W" !!!!!

    That is so beautiful Ali x

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  6. Bargain Decorating with Laurie19 October 2011 at 03:21

    I read it, entranced. Well done! laurie @ Battling My Inner Critic

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  7. Anonymous19 October 2011 at 09:59

    Excellent word picture. Well written.

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  8. Anonymous19 October 2011 at 18:53

    Very nice use of the prompt and if writing prose isn't something you do regularly, you should! :) Great job!

    Janece

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  9. bubbleboo20 October 2011 at 13:28

    Not your genre? It's wonderful! Really draws the reader in and it's beautifully written, too.

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  10. Anna20 October 2011 at 18:29

    Goodness me, I have read this several times now, I LOVE it . The lines "As diamonds, strung on gossamer thread
    the tiny beads of icy dew" are my favourite, but the whole poem scans beautifully.
    This really is a breath-taking piece Alison :)

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  11. Unknown20 October 2011 at 19:34

    Thank you all for the comments, I am thrilled you like it. I shall have more confidence to try other genre now.

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  12. Anonymous22 October 2011 at 15:08

    The imagery is beautiful, evocative, Robin

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  13. jfb5723 October 2011 at 18:04

    Oh stunning A! I love the gossamer. Really really strong images taking us right there with you. I do LOVE autumn!

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  14. Anonymous24 October 2011 at 06:23

    Oh, that was lovely. Almost makes like autumn more!

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  15. Unknown24 October 2011 at 09:04

    Thank you for the comments - it is good to share. I always enjoy all the other contributions.

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